Charlie II

My goodness, Jas. I don't think one "like" button is enough. Word choice You've got a great grasp of the right words to use -- really the main thing I'd ...

Hello again WaitingForLife. This was the piece I was originally going to review before I got distracted by the link at the top. :wink: Sully Kale Like Captaindomdude said, he's ...

Hello WaitingForLife -- here we go, I guess: Originality I'd like to start by saying I *love* your unique goblins. In fact there's a lot about this piece which is ...

Heya creativityrules! It's review day, so let's get to this: Rhythm I absolutely love your opening stanza and there's a very specific reason why. Sea flows in, washes out, leaving ...

Hello there Kyousuke, as requested! Direction It's an interesting prologue. Usually, at least in the books I've read, the Prologue sets the scene and gives details about what is about ...

Hey there Dhanshucool -- I saw you'd only got one review so far, and I thought I'd come along. Story Leaving technicalities aside for a moment, this is actually a ...

Joshuapaul, good sir. For you. Focus The beauty of these short pieces is that they can be so vivid and powerful. The trouble with these short pieces is that they've ...

Hello Priceless -- this is one of my "specially late" reviews. Ever so sorry about that! Hopefully I can still be of some help! :wink: Twilight Well, yes, this is ...

Hey Romance Otaku -- I'm sorry about the wait, but here I am! First impressions mean a lot -- and so your first chapter has to be the best of ...

I'm gonna be controversial and say that I like this more than the last poem of yours I read. I think it was "16 miles", but correct me if I'm ...

Lumidarling -- I struggled, I admit it, so if this makes no sense then please disregard it as a lost cause! Apologies for the lack of elegance and conviction, but ...

I have decide to listen to Chopin as I write this review! Hopefully it will infuse me with some sense! :wink: 1. Word choice First I'd like to say, as ...

An interesting piece, jasminebells. You've clearly got a good grasp of writing. Now it's all about perfecting and honing your craft. 1. Imagery Imagery is all about taste. The problem ...

Powerful stuff, Joshuapaul. I think I can find some advice for you nonetheless. :wink: Before I begin, I'd like to draw your attention to here: Please make sure you have ...

Hey W0lfbane, let's have a look at this (very!) short story! :wink: 1. Description The first thing I noticed, which was obvious because it wasn't there, was detailed description. Now ...